雅思大作文讨论双方观点7.5分范文 fixed punishments
这篇雅思写作大作文题目来自剑桥雅思7的第二套题目，要求大家讨论是否应该给每种罪行固定刑罚，属于讨论双方观点并给出自己意见的类型。按照雅思官方给出的评分，这篇范文在考试中取得了7.5的成绩。让我们一起来看看它有什么可取之处，又有什么缺点吧。
雅思写作大作文题目
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
一些人认为每种类型的犯罪都应该有固定的惩罚。然而，其他人则认为当决定惩罚措施的时候，每一起犯罪的情况，实行的动机都应该被考虑在内。讨论这两种观点并给出你自己的意见。
雅思写作大作文范文
Fixing punishments for each type of crime has been a debateable issue. There are many arguments supporting both views, those for and those against fixed punishments.
为每种犯罪固定惩罚是一个有争议的话题。无论支持与否，两种观点都有许多论据。
On the one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime, will reconsider committing this act in the first place.
一方面，固定的惩罚会对社会起到威慑作用。人们知道如果自己犯下特定的罪行的话，就会受到某种特定的惩罚，这样他们在行动之前会再次考虑一下。
If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of a reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.
如果人们知道，他们能够说服法庭或者法官，自己被指控的犯罪行为情有可原，那么文章来自老烤鸭惩罚的决定在很大程度上就会变得随心所欲起来。这会导致犯罪分子逃脱惩罚，并由于不同法庭的主观判断而造成很大的不公平。
On the other hand, taking the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into consideration is prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity.
另一方面，考虑犯罪环境和动机又是确保公平公正的前提。
A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next. In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity.
因自卫而杀人的人，无法与连环杀手相比。在我看来，两种解决方案之间的中间地带是确保公平公正的完美方式。
There have to be fixed punishments for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and a maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions.
所有类型的犯罪都必须有固定的惩罚。然而，刑法必须提供最大和最小的惩罚范围。法律也必须能够预见到一些特殊案例的豁免。
An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Competition Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime.
设立最小和最大惩罚范围的一个例子是竞争法。触犯该法律的人需要根据造成的损害和受益来支付罚款。
As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thiefs stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger.
至于豁免，在一些国家，法律考虑到窘迫与饥饿，会在饥荒时期赦免偷食物的贼。
Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.
此外，因自卫而杀人的人也会免于惩罚。
考官评价
考官给出7.5的理由如下：
文章思路严谨，有力的回答了题目中的问题。考生检验了相反意见，并给出自己论证充分的观点。但缺乏清晰的结论阻止了这篇文章取得更高的分数。
论证组织合理，从头到尾连接自然。然而分段较差，不同部分之间的连接有时让人疑惑。导致连贯与衔接方面丢分。
作者准确的使用了大量的词汇，只有很少的手误。句子结构多样，大部分都很准确。但存在一些错误和遗漏。但这些错误都很细小，不会影响交流。
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