剑桥雅思14 Test 4写作Task 1考官范文 公园的变化
剑桥雅思14第四套题目的小作文是一篇典型的地图题,要求大家描述某个公园从1920年到今天的变化。地图题虽然是雅思写作中不太常考的类型,但近几年来其考察频率有所上升(雅思地图题多久考一次),而且最重要的是很难找到相应的规律。所以大家在考前还是要认真准备一下,切不可疏忽。
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剑桥雅思14 test 4小作文题目
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
剑桥雅思14 test 4小作文考官范文
Grange Park was opened in 1920, a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue on the north side and from Eldon Street on the south side. There was a fountain in the centre, with a stage for musicians situated centre left, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon Street entrance and a pond for water plants in the north east corner opposite. Around the edges of the park there were rose gardens, with seats nearby for people to smell the flowers and listen to music.
The park has altered considerably since then. Now there is one large-ish rose garden, occupying the central area where the fountain stood, and with seats all around it. One of the smaller rose gardens remains on the north side of the park. The bandstand (stage for musicians) has also been replaced, by an amphitheatre for concerts and associated seating. The glasshouse has gone and in its places is a water feature; similarly, where the pond for water plants stood there is now a children’s play area with a café nearby Access to the park is still via the two original but there is now a third entrance near the water feature from an underground car park.
Despite the apparently significant changes, the park retains the basic elements of flowers, water, seating and music, with the addition of a café and a children’s play area.
剑桥雅思14 test 1小作文考官范文解析
Task achievement
1. 数据选取方面。文章涉及到了两张图片中所有的地点,无一遗漏。
2. 文章最后一段对两张地图进行了总结,因为之前已经详细说明了它们的变化。总阶段更加强调在这巨大的变动中有哪些基础因素保持了不变。
注意:地图题中不变的内容也非常值得大家总结,千万不要把目光局限于变动指出。
3. 文章对两张地图进行了合理对比。以位置为线索,逐步介绍哪些建筑进行了改变,而哪些又保留了原样。
Coherence and Cohesion
1. 文章逻辑结构合理。第一段描述1920年时公园的样子,第二段描述现在的变化,最后一段总结。不过跟我们以往的认知不同的是,这篇文章并没有对题目进行转述
2. 因为是地图题的缘故,文章主要使用方位词来连接不同的句子。
Lexical Resource
文章在增长幅度方面用词极为多样。具体总结请参考下方“高分词汇短语”部分。
Grammatical Range
语法结构方面,文章的大部分句子虽然都是简单句,但除了主谓宾的主干之外,还添加了各种各样的短语,以此来体现语法的多样性。
高分词汇短语总结
rectangular adj. 矩形的
access n. 入口
in the north east corner opposite 对面的东北角
edge of the park 公园的边缘
alter v. 改变
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